We strangers walk in casual rhythms
familiar ground beneath our feet.
I hear a couple speak a prelude
and pass a smile wondering if they know.
Monthly Archives: March 2014
Loss Assuredly
These things I know:
I was born in fear
and will die in ignorance.
The rest is a blur of sensations,
hunger mostly,
love maybe,
loss assuredly.
Clockwork
(tweeted 3.27.14)
Teeth bite and each gear’s turn
sets hands to motion,
ticking off the hours of the day.
Aftermath
(Tweeted 3.25.14)
Empty soldier, empty gun
Dragged through the aftermath of battle
Towards a white rose in the distance
Fading…
Experts
(tweeted 3.24.2014)
While experts in nothing
were jousting with words
the wind whispered something
and nobody heard.
On Meter and Form
The following is taken from an answer I gave to questions I received on a great writer’s forum I’m a part of. I’ve cleaned it up a bit for readability, but this is essentially the text as posted. As such, it is not even close to a complete handling of the topic. However, it was well received and people thought it was useful. I hope you do as well.
Could you outline the importance of form and meter?
Does having a meter improve the poem?
Let me answer your questions in reverse order.
Does having a meter improve the poem?
It depends on the poem. If your goal is a metrical poem then of course. If free verse, no, but in both case it is critical that you remain conscious of the syllabic arrangement of the words you are using and the impact on not only the music, but the meaning, and the emotional effect of your poem.
The effect of a series of unaccented followed by accented syllables is the same regardless of form. The same with successive accented ones. The former has a lazy almost conversational tone and the later communicates urgency, sometimes frivolity. This is true no matter of form. That’s only two examples, but I hope you see where this is going.
In traditional metrical verse there are standards governing the effective use of these sound patterns. These patterns evolved as poets explored the most effective means of conveying their intention in a pleasing manner. As rigid as these forms can seem, they are not arbitrary, and the best practitioners often deviate from their chosen pattern at key points for effect. Think of accidentals in music.
Could you outline the importance of form and meter?
No. Not without writing a book. I will try and illustrate. First with a metrical poem:
No Bird – Theodore Roethke
Now here is peace for one who knew
The secret heart of sound.
The ear so delicate and true
Is pressed to noiseless ground.Slow swings the breeze above her head,
The grasses whitely stir;
But in this forest of the dead
No bird awakens her.
Can you hear how the music has a delicacy that fits perfectly with the imagery and the theme of poem? Its opens in iambic tetrameter, followed by a trimeter. The pattern then repeats. It culminates in a sense of extreme gravity by the time we get to the last line where “No Bird” can almost be read as a spondee and then the 3 syllables of “awakens” rush to the finality of “her”. Which is fitting since the poem is about just that, the finality of her, the subject of the poem. This is a very cursory look at a great poem that deserves much better treatment, but I hope it helps.
Now for something completely different:
This is Just to Say – William Carlos Williams
I have eaten
the plums
that were in
the iceboxand which
you were probably
saving
for breakfastForgive me
they were delicious
so sweet
and so cold
This poem has been analyzed in several ways. Some that make it out to be an obscure reference to man’s fall, or some form of comment on repression – the whole forbidden fruit thing. I take it on face value. It’s delightful. Not everything needs to be deep. In any case, its structure an tone are whimsical.
This is no accident. Dr. Williams’ use of line breaks and accents are brilliant. If you just beat the syllables out on a table they are a joy. Combine the sound and the form and it’s easy to picture a man playfully teasing his wife about eating her plums. So again the words and the structure combine perfectly to convey the authors intent.
So at long last my point: Both of these poem are excellent examples of completely different styles. If you really want to understand the importance of the forms involved, try to apply their respective styles one to the other:
Here peace is
For one
that loved
some music
or
As for the plums that were for you
I ate them and was feed
you planned to eat them very true
Once risen from your bed.
It really is about picking the style that best fits your voice or your intent at the time. Please forgive any technical inaccuracies, etc. I think the point should still be clear.
Some reading if you’re interested:
A Poetry Handbook – Mary Oliver
Rules for the Dance – Mary Oliver
Free Verse: An Essay on Prosody – Charles O. Hartman
Poetic Meter and Poetic Form – Paul Fussel
Old Charlie
(tweeted 3.20.2014)
Cold steel conveyance
Alive on iron rails
Take me home Old Charlie
Take me home
Oliver
(tweeted 3.10.2014)
No Twisted Oliver
I stole into camp
feigning fealty
corrupting thieves.
Promises
(tweeted 3.9.2014)
I’ll not destroy them all but some
I’ll set aside and send a Son
whose body they’ll be damned to break;
in blood I’ll bid them to partake.
Library
(tweeted 3.6.2014)
Through rows of facing backstrips
My fingers trace monuments
rigid and spine’d,
touching the untouchable
I am haunted and moved.